Noah’s Novel Notes
Wow, love. WOW. The chemistry these two have is off the charts, but I adore the way you’ve brought in the deeper emotional aspects in this chapter.
BE has gone from grumpy, closed-off, and simply enjoying her fling to caring about BN, opening up to him, and thinking about the possibility of a future outside of the island. Well done!
The only loving criticism I have is that I would like to see a little more action in this scene.
Middles in novels are complicated, and if you’re not careful, they can fall flat and cause readers to become disinterested.
What ideas do you have that can connect with my next chapter?
What adventure can we send these two insta-lovebirds on while they have these deep, emotional conversations?
I love you, Esme. Can’t wait to see you tonight ;)